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A 1000 Word Essay About Potato Chips

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I don’t know if I should be concerned about this or surprised by it

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you've done some interesting things, concerning things, but this, this is too much, please see a therapist, im honestly concerned for your sanity.

very interesting yes yes

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Damn bro. Y'all out here with some choice flavors and opinions of said flavors. But nothing compares to the ol' purge trooper classic, and my personal favorite type of chip:

 

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11 hours ago, TheApple said:

Bit of honey soy chicken for the blokes

Honey soy chicken red rock deli but?

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Hi @Kristofer, thanks for submitting your assignment in on time for once! :D


"are available for grabs" This isn't really the tone we're looking for in an informative essay Kris.
"
by myself." - Let's try stick to Third-Person in these informative reports please Kristofer, it says this in the task sheet.
"I did not even know that there were this many flavours for the potato chip brand." Third-Person, Kris.
"The first flavour is the fan-favourite Lay's Classic." - I would like to see some stats about this, please.
"It’s overall just a solid potato chip flavour." - This is meant to be a professional paper, this sentence is Elementary.
"
unmistakenly my personal favourite flavour" - As a professional text this report should be kept unbiased, and again, Third-Person.
"This is a solid chip flavour, it’s not bad." - Unprofessional sentence, this is why you should attend the weekend workshops I hold in the quadrangle.
"
The fourth potato chip.." - A well-structured paragraph, well done, Kris.
"
name of the flavour reminds me.." - Third-Person.
"
The Kettle Cooked Lay’s Chips..." - Nice paragraph, very informative.
"
The Lay’s Wavy has a wavy and covered in ridges." - What were you trying to say here?
"
brand “Smith’s,”..." - The Comma should be outside the quotation marks if it's not apart of the brand's name.
"
brand “Ruffles.”" - You did it again here, we learnt about this in week 6.
"
Furthermore, in conclusion," - Pick one, not both.
"
I seem to be suffering an inability to sleep resulting in me spending most of tonight writing this four-page essay entailing the numerous flavours provided by the Lay’s brand of potato chips." - Third-Person.
"
References" - This section isn't in the appropriate layout, please look back at 'how to make a reference list 101' in your textbook.

Overall Kristofer a fairly neat and tidy report. Most of the time it was easy to read and for the most part it was very informative. Out of a possible 100 marks you have been deducted 16 making your total score 84/100, or 84%. This gets you a grade of a B. Make sure to read through all my notes so next time we can try aim higher. :) Enjoy your weekend Kristofer, see you in class next week. 

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25 minutes ago, Dirthi said:

Hi @Kristofer, thanks for submitting your assignment in on time for once! :D


"are available for grabs" This isn't really the tone we're looking for in an informative essay Kris.
"
by myself." - Let's try stick to Third-Person in these informative reports please Kristofer, it says this in the task sheet.
"I did not even know that there were this many flavours for the potato chip brand." Third-Person, Kris.
"The first flavour is the fan-favourite Lay's Classic." - I would like to see some stats about this, please.
"It’s overall just a solid potato chip flavour." - This is meant to be a professional paper, this sentence is Elementary.
"
unmistakenly my personal favourite flavour" - As a professional text this report should be kept unbiased, and again, Third-Person.
"This is a solid chip flavour, it’s not bad." - Unprofessional sentence, this is why you should attend the weekend workshops I hold in the quadrangle.
"
The fourth potato chip.." - A well-structured paragraph, well done, Kris.
"
name of the flavour reminds me.." - Third-Person.
"
The Kettle Cooked Lay’s Chips..." - Nice paragraph, very informative.
"
The Lay’s Wavy has a wavy and covered in ridges." - What were you trying to say here?
"
brand “Smith’s,”..." - The Comma should be outside the quotation marks if it's not apart of the brand's name.
"
brand “Ruffles.”" - You did it again here, we learnt about this in week 6.
"
Furthermore, in conclusion," - Pick one, not both.
"
I seem to be suffering an inability to sleep resulting in me spending most of tonight writing this four-page essay entailing the numerous flavours provided by the Lay’s brand of potato chips." - Third-Person.
"
References" - This section isn't in the appropriate layout, please look back at 'how to make a reference list 101' in your textbook.

Overall Kristofer a fairly neat and tidy report. Most of the time it was easy to read and for the most part it was very informative. Out of a possible 100 marks you have been deducted 16 making your total score 84/100, or 84%. This gets you a grade of a B. Make sure to read through all my notes so next time we can try aim higher. :) Enjoy your weekend Kristofer, see you in class next week. 

Don't listen to Dirthi, Kris, he is an alcholic and is probably reading your essay with double vision. Your essay actually netted you a score of 91/100, congratulations :)

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2 hours ago, Dirthi said:

Overall Kristofer a fairly neat and tidy report. Most of the time it was easy to read and for the most part it was very informative. Out of a possible 100 marks you have been deducted 16 making your total score 84/100, or 84%. This gets you a grade of a B. Make sure to read through all my notes so next time we can try aim higher. :) Enjoy your weekend Kristofer, see you in class next week. 

You're like my actual English teacher.
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25 minutes ago, Kristofer said:

You're like my actual English teacher.

I am your actual English teacher.

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Kristofer.
The type of guy who gets a kick out of writing school essays.

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If I had to mark this essay 9/10. The only thing that disappoints myself is the unimpressing bibliography. Where is the Author? Where is the date of publication? If this was a real 'Intellectual Essay' this oversight would of not been missed.




I would just like to say this is a 'joke'. It a 8/10 at best.

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