Hi @Kristofer, thanks for submitting your assignment in on time for once!
"are available for grabs" - This isn't really the tone we're looking for in an informative essay Kris. "by myself." - Let's try stick to Third-Person in these informative reports please Kristofer, it says this in the task sheet. "I did not even know that there were this many flavours for the potato chip brand." - Third-Person, Kris. "The first flavour is the fan-favourite Lay's Classic." - I would like to see some stats about this, please. "It’s overall just a solid potato chip flavour." - This is meant to be a professional paper, this sentence is Elementary. "unmistakenly my personal favourite flavour" - As a professional text this report should be kept unbiased, and again, Third-Person. "This is a solid chip flavour, it’s not bad." - Unprofessional sentence, this is why you should attend the weekend workshops I hold in the quadrangle. "The fourth potato chip.." - A well-structured paragraph, well done, Kris. "name of the flavour reminds me.." - Third-Person. "The Kettle Cooked Lay’s Chips..." - Nice paragraph, very informative. "The Lay’s Wavy has a wavy and covered in ridges." - What were you trying to say here? "brand “Smith’s,”..." - The Comma should be outside the quotation marks if it's not apart of the brand's name. "brand “Ruffles.”" - You did it again here, we learnt about this in week 6. "Furthermore, in conclusion," - Pick one, not both. "I seem to be suffering an inability to sleep resulting in me spending most of tonight writing this four-page essay entailing the numerous flavours provided by the Lay’s brand of potato chips." - Third-Person. "References" - This section isn't in the appropriate layout, please look back at 'how to make a reference list 101' in your textbook.
Overall Kristofer a fairly neat and tidy report. Most of the time it was easy to read and for the most part it was very informative. Out of a possible 100 marks you have been deducted 16 making your total score 84/100, or 84%. This gets you a grade of a B. Make sure to read through all my notes so next time we can try aim higher. Enjoy your weekend Kristofer, see you in class next week.